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Elizabeth Stone There seemed to be a lot of text that was not attached directly to images, as well as some text that was hard to read because of the colors. I like that you used the colors of the horsemen to tie it together, but you may need to rearrange the text to make them as legible as possible. Lorin Weaver Your point only comes out toward the end of the presentation, it would be more effective, I think, to bring that out earlier, possibly as a title, so that the images have the context to convey the intended meaning as we see them as opposed to seeing the meaning primarily in retrospect. Benjamin Miller I really like how you used the dual pictures to tell the story, making it so that the text enhances and clarifies the story without having to tell it. If I were to suggest anything it would be to use some sort of color cue to heighten the contrast of the paired scenarios, either within the photos or as a border. Brandon Lalli The point you are making is very important and relevant, and the arrangement of your project was apt. You may want to include some text to provide more facts about the bills, as well as some mention of fair use and the way that interacts with the bills, as well as the most dramatic problem- that just one infringing user can cause the entire site to be removed without any legal proceedings or opportunities to employ the fair use defense. Possibly also emphasize that not only did Megavideo go down, and Deviant Art is threatened, but Youtube, Tumblr, Facebook, and any site that allows user content could or would be affected. Chandler Wilson You tie the presentation in with the ideas from Ramage beautifully, however I feel like you could have built the story more strongly, placing more emphasis on the actual images and story, possibly including some of the Ramage ideas within the presentation to give it more depth. Danica Cantrell Your images were well chosen to convey the message you sought to tell, and the way you used the text to shape the viewer’s interpretation of the images was well done. One thing I might suggest would be to expand the story to connect more directly to yourself and the audience. Seth Eckman The message is strong, and many of the images are apt, however it is very, very dark and hard to see what was in the pictures, in a few I don’t even know what the picture is of. The impact of the pictures would be heightened if a few remained in color or the background were lighter- not white, but perhaps light grey. ___________________________________________ I remain slightly at a loss with how to continue to improve my presentation as I'm receiving considerably mixed opinions upon the clarity of what I'm trying to convey and the manner in which I do so. Some of my peers seem to grasp the metaphorical connections of the images to the process automatically and instinctively, while others not until they are pointed out. Adding more text seems to have helped people follow the train of thought, but now I feel it almost leans too heavily on some of it. This is all aside from the fact that it is now clear that the concept I'm pursuing is more abstract than this project is meant to deal with, but it seems too late to be able to change it and still end with a good product. I'm also considering building a meta part to the prezi in order to most effectively tie in the course materials.