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 * Elizabeth Stone-** Good job relating to Sontag to help your argument. The text was hard to read both size and color choice. The photos chosen were very good and also relevant to your argument. I think you could do a better job explaining what went into making your VSP and what ideas and theories went into it.


 * Lorin Weaver-** I like the personal photos, it adds a certain aspect which enhances the VSP. You did a good job integrating ready-mades and the theory of defamiliarizing. The text was easy to read, unlike some of the other presentations. Overall it was a good presentation. Only suggestion I could make is to talk more about the readings in class.


 * Benjamin Miller-** Good use of the arrows in the prezi. It shows that this action leads to this action, which leads to this action and so on. Having the two choices side by side helps us understand the different outcomes that could come about from one image. Each picture relates to one another, for example, passed out on the floor versus the bed. Once again, like most others, there could have been less time talking about your argument and more time talking about what thinking went into it.


 * Brandon Lalli-** Good use of going back to the same pictures but putting the mask in it was an effective way of presenting your argument. The ‘V’ was a cool idea for your picture configuration. Spend less time talking about your argument and more time talking about the readings. I didn’t here anything in your presentation about what thought processes went into your VSP.


 * Chandler Wilson-** The photos in the prezi were clear and understandable. Some of the text was a little hard to read. Good job of backing up your argument with Ramage’s ideas; one of the only people to actually do that. Also, you did a good job of relating the Given and the Constructed to your story. Also, your story is easily relatable to almost any audience.


 * Danica Cantrell-** Putting yourself into the presentation makes it a stronger argument. Nice job of using Sontag as your main backing for your presentation. Your presentation was very good, using ideas from Sontag, Ramage, and Shields. You did a good job explaining why you did what you did. You touched upon a lot of different readings and brought them into one idea.


 * Seth Eckman-** Personally, I think there was too much text. Your story/argument should be explained more through pictures with only a little help from text. Some of the photos were hard to see because of them being in black and white. Good job talking about defamiliarizing, but you could do different things besides just black and white to do that. Your presentation itself was good and you did a good job using different readings and saying why you did what you did.


 * Amber Howe-** Throughout all of the pictures, the girl looks similar which enhances the story. It starts off with the question, “What is true love”, but then goes on to say you should love yourself, which takes away the readymade of true love. In your presentation itself, you could have talked less about your question and more about the readings and such. The prezi should pretty much explain the question and leave us wondering.


 * Deanna Brown-** I really like how you presented what the books and such say in one color, but what reality is in black. It separates the two from each other. During your explanation, you did a good job of getting rid of the readymade of the typical parenting styles that the media gives us. As with the others, you could have talked about the readings more and related your prezi to them.


 * Kelsey Shapiro-** I like how you grouped the different examples together in different frames. You talked about the act motion in Ramage but you should explain what that is and then relate it to your prezi. Good use of denotation and connotation. Unlike most others, you did a good job relating your prezi to the readings and explaining why you did what you did. P.S- You can talk at extreme speeds.


 * Estelle Reidler-** Good explanation of why you did what you did in the prezi and also connecting your presentation to the readings we had in class. You used a lot of terms in explaining your reasoning for using different terms and ideas. I like how you used photoshop to make it look like some things were a dream. Not what I expected at the end but it was a strong ending.


 * Charlotte Moyer-** Some of the text was hard to read, don’t be afraid to use brighter colors. I like how at the end it zooms out and shows the loop that the pictures are in, which symbolizes the loop of creating writing. Throughout the prezi, I wasn’t quite sure of the story or argument. The explanation of your prezi helped me understand but the prezi itself should be able to tell the story. A lot of good symbolisms in this presentation but relate them more to the readings.


 * Jenny Mascaro-** I think the use of first person as if you are the lady on the ship, putting yourself in the presentation. Also, good use of the pictures all being in black and white, showing a grime and dark time. In the presentation itself, you had a good explanation of why you did what you did, but as with the others, you could have talked more about the readings.