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Monday VSP Responses
Elizabeth Stone I though that this was an interesting take on the end of the world. I have read Revelations several times so it was nice to see another persons view of the apocolpse. The text was hard to read on some pictures. The pictures were a little too close together. The color of the text in the last slide was hard to read—too dark. Maybe you could mix the text around the images.

Lorin Weaver We are one of the lucky ones. Don’t take life for granted. I thought that the Prezi flowed very nicely and definitely gleamed a message from it. I would suggest removing some pictures. There were a lot of pics that have the same meaning. For instance the lady on the couch, followed by the lady laying on the street. The lady on the couch could probably be taken out. This photo has less power, when compared

Benjamin Miller I like the question in the beginning. The question jump starts the audiences thinking. There is a story and an argument going at the same time. I like how the two fit together. I like how there are two paths and we see the result of both choices, the decisions that he makes affects him one way or another. I would suggest making the quote on the last slide larger text, and use //italics//.

Brandon Lalli I like how when he zoomed out all the pictures were in the shape of “V”—representing V for Vendetta, a symbol for revolution.

Chandler Wilson I like how you changed the Prezi since I last look at it. You really expanded and deepened your argument from the family tree idea.

Danica Cantrell I liked how you used Ramages idea of readymades to prove your point. I am not sure what your argument is. I like how this Prezi is directed towards a specific audience. What is the end result? That everything happens in its own good time? Are these readymades wrong or write? Maybe you could put some conclusion at the end. Some type of climax that gives the audience the “solution” to the problem.

Seth Eckman I like how you bounced back and forth between pictures and text. This really helped me understand what your message was. What is “taste of victory”? I like how you used a black background and black and white photos; this set a dark mood for the Prezi, emphasizing the message. I like how the photos tell a story. I would suggest changing the flow of the path. Maybe when the drinking starts make the path move down, when things get better make the path move up. Like an emotional roller coaster ride.

Wednesday May 2nd Responses
Amber Howe I liked how you used ready-mades to prove your point. I like how you expanded the idea of true love beyond a girl and boy but to friends and family, even loving yourself. I like the photo of the child with the mirror. I thought that the conclusion was not very strong. I’m confused as to why there are questions about what true love is.

Deanna Brown I liked how you zoomed back to old pictures and honed in on certain sections to make a particular point. After you gave the explanation things made a lot more sense. I liked the personal anecdotes. Maybe you could find a photo to go with the good instincts at the end? Maybe you could combine some of the text with the photos in you Prezi.

Kelsey Shapiro I really liked how you organized your Prezi—the bubbles and circles looked fantastic. I liked how you worked in the music notes. I personally love music and it was interesting to see these viewpoints and the order that you placed them in your Prezi. I was a little confused about the message that you were trying to send, maybe you could make that more clear at the end of the Prezi.

Jenny D Mascaro I liked the changes that were made to the photos. I really liked how you zoomed in on some parts. I’m not sure what the purpose of the prezi was. Who is the audience?

Estelle Reidler A lot of the text was really hard to read. Maybe you could move the text outside of the picture and use a frame to encapsulate the text and photo. I liked how when you zoomed out the whole “process” was indeed a big loop. The explanation of the photos really helped me understand the message you are trying to send. Maybe with the black and white photo of the flowers to represent “hitting the wall” could be replaced with a dead or dying flower instead of the lively one.

Charlotte Moyer I liked how the Prezi moved from left to right, just like we would read in a story. Maybe you could widen the frames around the photos and text—much of the text was cut off.