Allebach+J+Wk+13

Revisions:

I revised my Prezi immensely from where I started:

- I was reminded that to create a valid rhetorical argument, I had make sure I established the ethos of the agent (me). To do this, I had to show my audience that I personally struggled with the question I was presenting. If they didn't know that I struggled, worked through, and answered the question, why would they care about it? So I put the question within the terms of my own personal experience rather than my audience's - only asking the audience the question after they were able to see my own personal struggle with it.

- The original image that sparked my project was not placed within a context. This hindered the understanding of my audience, so I put the image in the context I originally viewed it in (Facebook Newsfeed) to help with this problem.

-Rhetorical Arguments require an action in return from my audience - a good rhetorical argument does, anyway. And in order for them to react or to answer the question, there needs to be a solution. This was also lacking in my original draft, and I added it in my working final draft. The posed question - what do we do about this thing? (according to Ramage) - needs to also have a proposed answer. And so I gave my audience a solution in my final draft!

-I also plan to switch around some photographs so that they better apply to the strategy of this argument and tweak a few other things!