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=**April 30th Presentations**=


 * Elizabeth: I like the way she incorporated the Sontag quot about "looking at something in a new way" because this is what her presentation caused her audience to do. She represented the four horses (pestilence, death, famine, war) with photographs of events that have happened and are happening across the world. I had never thought about this before, despite having read the passage in the Bible depicting the four horses. So, for me, she accomplished her goal of causing me to look at something I already knew about in a new way! I would suggest that she increase the font size as it was difficult to read some sections...maybe even cut out some of the text, too much of it in some areas.**


 * Lorin: I really like the idea she presented. I read her original plan for her visual story project a few weeks, I could tell that she changed it based on contemplating the course material. I think she wanted to just portray various bedtime moments based on the book //Goodnight Moon// but she changed it to present a question for her audience and she also used her own personal experience as a basis. I also liked the way she tied in course material in her explanation. Text was hard to read in a few circumstances when zooming in and out.**


 * Ben: I loved this idea. Using his own images added a nice personal touch and presenting the images side by side really emphasized the idea of the consequences of choices. I appreciated that he talked about his own difficulties of creating the project, and the idea of having to defamiliarize yourself with the images because he took them and set them up. I would suggest zooming in a bit more on the photographs, as a few were a bit blurry and hard to comprehend what was happening in the photographs in just the few seconds we had to look at them.**


 * Brandon: The idea he chose was quite interesting. The V-shape at the end was quite ingenious, and the repetitiveness of the images worked well to get his point across. If his goal was to get his audience to think about internet censorship in a new way (or perhaps for the first time), he accomplished it. I'm not sure about how he tied in course material to your project, talking about it or including in the prezi might be a good idea. Also, I had never encountered the mask in terms of dissatisfaction with the government in this form. This might undermine his goal, unless the majority of the audience does know what it is. I could be more alone in not knowing about it than I think!**


 * Chandler: I really liked the project! She actually caused your audience to look at course material in a new way - which I thought was quite ingenious. The idea of the given identity working into the constructive identity was something I had never thought about before. Family is clearly a part of our given identity, as we have no choice about it and it is inherited, but the bonds we form with those family members is more a part of our constructed identity. I especially liked that she used her own family photographs and her own experiences to represent this idea. I honestly cannot think of any serious suggestions - perhaps simplify texts in some areas. A few photographs appeared blurry, though I'm not sure this can be fixed because old family photographs often lack clarity!**


 * Danica: Interesting prezi and very well presented. She did a good job at showing us the "aggressive" nature photographs can take on - telling us what we need, when we need it, and how to get it. She also did a good job showing the irony of conflicting messages and the need for us to pick out what we will and will not believe out of those messages. ("accept some models and reject others") I also appreciated her own conclusion or solution to the problem she proposed. If we receive both conflicting models, what do we choose? She chose to be an independent and strong woman (as the first message suggested) while waiting for her prince charming (as the second message suggested). Excellent!**


 * Seth: Interesting idea, but it was a bit hard to follow. The topic applies well to your audience generally, as many are facing the conflict you represented. I understand the need to make the images black and white and bit blurry for the purpose of defamiliarization, but I'm not sure if it fit in with your purpose for the audience.**